Opening scenaration - Miss Miller

The opening scene of our thriller film begins with a little girl in Victorian clothing sitting in a garden playing with a doll whilst singing, we see many different angles of the girl then she suddenly drops the doll and runs away. The camera zooms into the doll which has a large leaf on its head to create foreboding. The scene cuts to inside the house when the little girl is running up the stairs but her face isn't shown, the babysitter then walks through the door saying 'bye' to Alice's parents, the puts her blanket on the side and hears some banging upstairs. She calls out 'Alice?' and without an answer walks up the stairs and turns on the lights. The camera then follows over her shoulder when she walks into a room and finds a gas mask on the bed, when she picks it up a slam of a door sounds and alarms the babysitter causing her to drop the mask and run down to where the sound came from. She puts her ear to the door and a music box sound is playing, she opens the door and calls out 'Alice?' again, the window is open and as she goes to shut it Alice is outside under a lamp post with a gas mask on facing away from the babysitter. Alice then turns round and the camera jumps to her face the cuts back to the babysitter running down the stairs to the front door, the camera goes into a handheld shot and jumps with flashes towards Alice with mysterious singing echoing in the background. The babysitter puts her hand on Alice's shoulder and Alice looks round quickly with the mask on her face and the scene ends.

We could improve our opening scene by cutting down on the amount of repeated shots of Alice in the garden, it took up quite a lot of our 2 minute limit, it also may bore the audience as it takes some time for the opening to become scary and mysterious. Also we could have less shots following the babysitter, although it puts the audience in her point of view and create an emotional link, it can come across quite boring at times especially if the opening is only 2 minutes long.